1. Give more detail leading up to his death. Give readers a little more information on Joey and family.
2. Sources could be friends and Family of Joey and what they have to say about Joey.
3. Its descripitive but include an event that happend with you.
4. Mabye tell how he died, but mainly give more info on Joey other than the introduction.
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